Carter Taylor Mondo(DONE!)

Full review time, thank you for your patience! ^_^

First off, basics! The only thing you need to do here is to add that Irma Lair is from W.I.T.C.H., and then you're golden, awesome!

Appearance! We've got the basics sketched out, but I'd like to see a little more, if possible? A touch more on her hair, length, if it's got curl, etc. What's her skin tone? Any blemishes? What do you mean by 'average' height and weight, could you make it a touch more specific? Average can differ! What about her clothes, can you be more specific on what you mean by 'modern'? What about her typical facial expression? How does she hold herself? What kind of 'aura' does she give off, confident, shy, what? Just more details, please!

Personality! Could you please not divide it up into sections/a list like that~? Thank you! For the most part, it looks good, I just need elaboration on what she does, versus how she is. How does she know all that she knows about everyone? How does she act shy, does she just not speak to people, keeps her head down all the time, what? How exactly does she live in the moment, and what does she look for when she's looking for 'fun'? Just elaborate on that, please, give us what she does! Most importantly, though, photographic memories do not work like that. Please, do some research, or ask any questions of us you may have, because it doesn't work in that manner, thank you!

Strengths! Could we have some more elaboration on them, please? What do you mean, history, does she enjoy it, her best subject? What languages, why does she know so many, and why aren't they shown in her history? How is she 'courageous' if she's so shy? Doesn't quite make sense, I'm afraid! How is staying out of people's way a strength? Why does she blackmail people? What kind of secrets are we talking? Just elaboration, please~.

Weaknesses! Okay... The lack of confidence makes sense, but how does she have that, when she's apparently 'courageous'? And detail, please! How is her being 'too curious' a bad thing, what happens, what does she do? What 'sides' are you speaking of, how is she manipulated? I thought you said she had friends that she lived her life to the fullest with, so then how is she lonely? And if she has ADHD, you really need to research it. You can't just say that she has it, you need to express that in her personality, and in her history... That's a big deal, and we want it expressed realistically, okay?

Okay, while Carter may not know her own history, can we have the details on what went down, for that first paragraph? What happened? She may not know, but we'd like to know, please! ^_^ Okay... Why did she gain a lot of weight? If she wasn't chubby before, there's typically some reason as to why... And we need other details, please! How did her Mom deal with this, didn't she tell anyone? They could certainly get those people in trouble~. Did she have any friends? How did she do in school?

What made her finally hit her peak, what made her realize she was done? Why Kadic, if her mother decided to move, as it's a boarding school? Does that mean she still lives at home, then, instead of rooming in the dorm? How 'fat', of sorts, was she, then, if she could lose it all in just a summer? That doesn't seem very realistic, unless it wasn't very much at all... Does she intend to still work out, to keep it off? Because it's an active thing, you need to keep working at keeping it off. Or does she not know that? Just more details in general, please! ^_^

The RP sample looks good, though I would recommend looking into the grammar, there, got some 'eh' spots.

Over all, a good application! Just needs some research on photographic memory and on ADHD, expansion, and just look over it all for grammar issues, okay, you've got some spots of that? Lemme know when you're done, and I'll look over it again! ^_^